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Abigail's avatar

I did not expect that ending! I agree with Lauren. It is a thrilling poem.

Zane Paxton's avatar

Thank you, Abigail.

Lauren Alison's avatar

Whoa. I felt like I was reading an ageless poem. The mounting action reminded me of a poem I loved in highs school. I can't recall it now. Superb. And your choice of art captured me.

Zane Paxton's avatar

Thank you so much for that compliment, Lauren.

Tim Forsythe's avatar

Wonderful internal rhymes. I didn’t check to see if any of the lines were acephalous, that is headless, but it wouldn’t surprise me with the obvious great care you took in is construction. Cheers.

Zane Paxton's avatar

Thank you, Tim. I admire your poetry as well!

Jewell July's avatar

This is epic. What a great read!

David Rizzo's avatar

Wow, Zane, this is really good! Nothing is forced. Everything flows in a natural diction suitable to the subject. And the end, I wish the latter day masters of war would read this and pay attention to the ending.